“Voices in My Head”: fantasy powers, Asian setting, nonbinary MC // StayHomeWriMo Day 7

Hey, everyone!

I hope you liked yesterday’s surprise with me naming all the characters off of bloggers XD. It was super fun to write and I’ll be making sequels for ‘Kore’, ‘Switcheroo’, and any others that get requests!

I really liked my worldbuilding in this short story, I wonder what Sophie thinks 😉

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Prompt: Write a 400-word story in the fantasy genre. It’s about a confusing power and a frustrated hero.

Be quiet, Ying thought. Just be quiet!

Ying grabbed their head and groaned, their fingers digging into their forehead and scalp. The voices blabbered meaninglessly. As much as Ying tried to make out their words, they were never able to.

Leave peacefully, Ying tried. Be at rest.

Ying’s mother had always told Ying to be kind and gentle to the voices in their head. Ying had tried, for about a month, before they broke down and became frustrated.

It was supposed to be a power, really. But Ying was certain that the voices in their head was more of a curse than any sort of power.

They had first come around six months ago when Ying came out to their mother and friends as nonbinary. Ying had been eagerly hoping for a power since they were a little child since Ying had first learned of the powerful Magicka.

Only about ten percent of all people were Magicka and had powers. And even among them, some were the Simple Magicka; like Taelors, who could weave with their minds and Valens, who had heightened senses.

Others were more intricate and were called the Complex Mackica; Herba, who grew vines and plants, Kansa, who could manipulate metal, and Pulsa, who could start and slow heartbeats.

The most formidable were the Elemental Magicka, who had the most powerful gifts Nature could offer. Caelum could harness the winds and levitate, Humidum had the tides at their hand, and Incaendium owned the gift of fire.

Those were the only powers that any Magicka had ever had, but when Ying started to hear the voices in their head, their mother, Rushi, immediately rushed Ying to the town priest, who was as alarmed as Ying.

Neither Rushi nor Ying’s father, an unknown man, had been Magicka. Ying’s ‘power’ was unheard of and no one had a clue about what it meant except for Shu Baobao, the old man in the village.

He had said that when Ying came out, they had changed so much and embraced themselves that they had brought out a power in themselves. This power, Baobao said, would only truly reveal itself when Ying had completely adjusted to her new self.

But when Ying did, he said a new, dangerous power would emerge. One that no one had ever had, one that was unlike anything that anyone had seen.

Of course, that was just old man talk, everyone else said. Only Rushi and Ying believed it. Even Ying was still unsure of whether or not to believe an old man with such an outlandish claim that was unheard of.

Just then, Ying gasped, opening their eyes. The voices in their head were clearing up!

Grocers open… tomorrow? Hopefully… she is such a stuck-up brat!… when will the toilet cleaner come?… my school bag is missing… I’ll never find my dog again… Hurry up…

Ying felt a chill come through their body. They recognized some of these voices; the first was Ying’s mother, Rushi. And the others belonged to Ying’s neighbors: Zhi Lai, the girl two years younger than Ying, Zhi Lai’s father, Fat Chung and Ying’s other neighbors Yue Suyin and Wu Mao.

Ying’s powers had manifested. They could hear others’ voices telepathically.

Take a deep breath, Ying thought. Don’t scream, Ying.

Ying screamed anyways.

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Okay, NOT at all happy with the ending to be honest. I have no idea how I could have ended it, though! Any ideas?

Have you read any Asian fantasies? What books does this remind you of? How do you think I could have ended this story differently?

Have a great day and stay safe!

xoxoadiforadi1

22 thoughts on ““Voices in My Head”: fantasy powers, Asian setting, nonbinary MC // StayHomeWriMo Day 7

  1. Ahh… I loved this!! I loved how much worldbuilding you were able to do in a short space of time like all the magic sounds so wonderful (I love the elemental magic, it makes me think of avatar as well now) and I already have a feel of the setting !! This is awesome, I loved reading it!! And I really liked how you ended it as well, it felt like you could see this going somewhere and I would DEFINITELY be screaming if I heard voices, that would be a stressful but you could definitely do lots with it!! AGAIN, GREAT POST!! I am loving reading your writing!! ❤ ❤

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    1. Thank you! Yeah haha I didn’t want to get too close to Avatar but I kind of based the magic of of Six of Crows if that makes sense :D. There’s three categories and each of them has a cool name haha. Thank you so much! Yes, poor Ying 😦 ❤ ❤ you are so sweeeet ❤

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  2. yay i’m so excited for Switcheroo part two!!!! 😀 and this is SOO intriguing, i love how intricate you made the worldbuilding in a short period of time. 😉 Ying sounds like a really great mc that i would love to know more about, and i thought the ending was perfectly written!!! amazing post as usual ❤ ❤

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  3. I loved this so much Aditi! 💖 The ending did not suck at all, contrary to your opinion (I sound straight out of a Shakespearean novel 😂) the ending was actually really good. I have no idea what worldbuilding is, so I’m going to check out that pot you linked now! Also I loved al the powers, it reminded me a lot of Grisha in the Six of Crows duology, and I just generally really enjoyed reading this – I’ve never read an Asian fantasy before! Love this x 😊

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    1. Thank you so much! Ahaha no 😉 it doesn’t sound like Shakespeare lmao. Yes that post was really interesting! I hope you understand a bit better now 💙 yesss that’s EXACTLY what I based it off of. I’m glad you found out! Oh nooo you absolutely neeD to! 🥺😄

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      1. Anytime! 💖 Why thank you (okay admit it, that did 😂)! Yes I do, thank you! 💗 Wait for real?! You read Six of Crows too!! Whose your favourite character? 💕 Awww – me too! 🥺 x

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  4. I dunno wachu talking bout, girl, that ENDING WAS PERRFECT!!!
    the story kinda reminds me of Children of blood and bone…have you read it? It’s not an Asian fantasy, but this story gives off similar vibes XD
    I loved this one, the writing itself was beautiful, and the story just elevated it!!!

    yuss yuss sequels…sequels FOR EVERY STORY!!!!!

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    1. Aww, thank you!!!
      Omg I loved that book! It had some elements like that for sure!! I based the fantasy systems off of Six of Crows and Children of Blood and Bone so you’re spot on XD.
      Thank you angel ❤ 😉 (hahaha we wish XD but I might write a sequel for some more!)

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